Welcome to the Fish Tank by Big Kahuna
If you are one of those people who does not require realism in your stories in order to suspend your disbelief and enjoy a good piece of fiction, than this might be the book for you. This is, after all, a work of erotica and erotica plays by a different set of rules than most any other genre. Erotica is fantasy based, and though it didn’t work for me, that doesn’t mean it’s not hit-the-nail-on-the-head perfect for someone else. It was fairly well written, there were only a few minor editing problems, and compared with many indie books out there, you could do a whole lot work the Big Kahuna. However, here were my problems with the story:
#1) This was a kidnapping story. Granted, kidnappings are frequent erotic-fodder in the imaginations of many people, and I am one of them. But I found her reactions to her situation to be jarringly unrealistic. Not at first, where her responses are exactly as one would expect a woman’s to be when she wakes up in a strange place, under slightly ominous circumstances. I’m sorry, but having bigger boobs is not compensation for being some stranger’s plaything without your consent.
#2) It’s a little nit-picky point, but I counted at least two and probably three different places in that story where Marina would have died. Yes, it’s a fantasy, but even fantasies should abide by the laws of physics. For instance, the human gasp of shock and/or fear. This sound is not made by a rapid exhale that would cause Marina to blow pretty bubbles. This is caused by a sudden inhale of air or, in Marina’s case, water, which would result in an instant coughing/vomiting spasm as she tried to get the water out of her lungs. She never would have survived however long she spent under anesthesia without her mouth being taped shut. It’s little slips of detail like this that I found too difficult to look beyond even just long enough to enjoy this story for the fish tale that it was. (Sorry, sorry. Couldn’t resist.) 3 Stars